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Saturday, 25 September 2021

my writing

My writing



The day i woke up with super powers!

I woke to a strange high pitched sound and jumped out of bed. My head was quaking and thumping and my body was shaking violently but i start to get dressed. At school it gets worse then better and eventually it stops but i still can hear the whistle. My bullies circle around me my head looks down and I whimper, they start to laugh ‘hey nerd I thought i told you to do my homework! So where is it?’ one of them spat at me  

I stay silent and think I have had ENOUGH of this! And suddenly my hand swoops up and punches him in the face, I stare silently like I had just seen a ghost.

We all stand around the principles desk and he gives us a disappointing look.

‘What, happened?’ He said sharply

‘SHE, hit me!’ the bully said

‘And they, we’re bullying ME’ I shoot back

The principle gave us a look of dismay.

‘I am afraid I will have to call both of your parents, you are dismissed.’ and he waved a hand to the door.

Later on I bumped into them and they start teasing me, I fell like I am about to burst into flames. Suddenly as the principle walks past I start to kick and punch them everyone crowded around me.

The principle had finally had enough 

WHAT HAS GOTTEN INTO YOU!’ he screams

I start to cry

Somebody steps in front of me and says

‘I know what is wrong with her!’

‘What?’

‘She has super powers!’ ‘she has the one where if she thinks of something she does it!’ ‘I have it too’ 

He calls the police

We hear sirens and then they burst through the door and sleep fog dangles in the air like a puppet on a string and I black out…

I wake in a lab and can’t move. I start to wiggle my arms free.

I free myself and run around trying to find a door. Then I notice someone watching me.

I whisper to them 

‘Do you know the way out?’

And they nod and point to a wall, I run there and open it I come to the main hallway and sirens go off I run strait to the exit and slam the door shut behind me.

My mother opens the door door looking worried 

‘Are you OK?, you are just in time for dinner!’

I run inside.

I go to sleep.

I wake up and I had no more powers and everything was back to normal.

 

1 comment:

  1. Hi Lily, its really awesome to see that you are beginning to develop your narrative structure by introducing the build up (fighting against bullies and being called to the principal's office), climax (being taken by the police) and ending (she escapes). Keep up the great work!

    This week, we have been learning to fill in the gaps in our story by adding detail. As a reader, there are some things I want to find out more of:
    - Why was your character taken to the lab?
    - Did the police try to find her when they realize she was missing?

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