hallo peeps wassup I hope you are enjoying your lock down! Hopefully less then a week to go!
If the world became vegetarian?
Plants would Grow like weeds and people would be inventing different meals and foods out of veggies and fruits and we would make more healthy juices to drink.
Mell ran through her fields that surrounded her house waiting for her friend Katy. They always make fruit smoothies to drink on the hot summer days. After half an hour she finally comes and rushes up to her and hugs her. We both grin and head inside, my mother switches on the blender so that we can put fruit in it then blend it. Me and Katy go outside to pick berries and Mell sneaks one inside her mouth and savor the sweet flavor of the strawberry. Katy does the same. They head back inside with armfulls of fresh berries, we get almond milk and tip them inside with the berries, then they switch it on and watch the berries swirl and twirl around the blender. When it’s finished they split in half and pour it into their smooth glasses that gleam in the sun like diamonds. Mells mother greets them with some celery and hummus so they munch on celery with hummus and a smoothie to go with. It was quite a meal ‘that was wonderful! Thank you so much i’ll see you tomorrow!’ gleams Katy, Mell waves goodbye and heads out to the fields. ‘What's for dinner mother?’ asked Mell
‘Apricot and veggie salad with fish’ she replied
‘Yay!’ Mell exclaimed
‘Can I please go to the farm to milk the cows?’ she asked
‘Sure! Make sure that you don’t hurt the cows though because they are just like us humans!’ her mother quarried
And thats where we leave the story.
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Hi Lily, I love all the precise verbs you've used, including grin, twirl, savour. It helps me to imagine your story in my mind. Also great to see that you've used a simile- "they pour it into their smooth glasses that gleam in the sun like diamonds". I can just imagine drinking it!
ReplyDeleteYou are beginning to add details to your setting. Continue to describe using the senses, does the field radiate the perfume of berries and hay? Can you hear cattle lowing in the distance?
To develop your story, try to think of a problem that builds up to a climax. What if Mel finds that the cows have disappeared? Or that a mysterious vegetable/plant has grown in the fields?
Remember to use the same point of view in your story. I noticed that you used third person at the beginning (they) and then switched to first person (we, I) later on.
All in all, great effort! I really enjoyed reading your story!